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问好不胜凉风,上片铺垫不错,下片“纵然千字总归迟”没有准确的把握住情感上的提升和给予“迟”最好的诠释。个见哈,不当之处还请见谅,冰儿学习了,谢谢!
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问好眉月,小词读来顺畅,区区几笔,一幅醉人秋景流于笔端。“清风”可酌。个见哈,不当之处还请见谅,冰儿学习了,谢谢!
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