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小渔村律研一期清竹组第十二讲作业贴 |
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问好沉墨!起句点题、承句的承接及扩展、转句的变换及合句的收放均做得好。整首诗的脉络清晰,虚实结合,气势,韵领等章法都做到了,很好!
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颔联下分句略有凑对之嫌疑。整体未见夏天之意
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