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问好词友!小词格律无误,赞!试评:1.主题为夏思,上片铺景,有静有动(绿树,鹂啭,云绕楼,日拂帘);下片述思(谁人同游)。思路清晰,赞!2.个见:上片为美景,是白天;下片忽转为望月,有些突兀;且所述之思为
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