2939| 31
|
29期诗班五律第四讲菊组作业贴(组长:亭亭玉立) |
点评
问好诗友!这首五律!整体看还是蛮好的!对仗句还待凝练!
| ||
点评
问好诗友!这首五律平仄无误,用韵无误!但整体貌似有些混乱条理不清,颈联跟桃花貌似无关!对仗还待凝练!还有最后两句也跟咏貌似无关联!
| ||
| |
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
GMT+8, 2025-7-22 23:11 , Processed in 0.072864 second(s), 25 queries .