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今夕何夕浅评:同学的词格律正确,有景有情。从残荷的冬令现状写到往昔夏日曾经的繁华,再回到现实中表达对荷的怀敬之情。词味浓浓,领字句读运用得当,学习了!只有“外直中通”句可再斟酌。我个人理解同学是想表达
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