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钦定合律,题目梅雨闺思,一片少女情怀,词作整体清丽。流畅度也不错。个人感觉稍微有点瑕疵在尾句,过于意象堆砌。个见勿怪!欣赏学习!
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钦定合律,词作回忆送友人,流畅度较高,感觉稍微有点瑕疵是风卷句有点过于实和硬了,个见勿怪!欣赏学习!
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